Chapter endings that work

Last week I took a Great Icon of English literature and trashed his cliffhanger chapter ending. And I think I was right enough about the badness of his endings, but I also realise that I didn’t actually offer much about what good endings actually look like.

So, today we investigate that.

I’m going to look at chapter endings from Katherine Rundell’s Impossible Creatures, a book aimed at roughly 10-12 year old readers, but which also sold plenty to adults too. The book won a ton of prizes and sold lots of copies, so it’s a pretty fair place to look for inspiration.

I’m going to put chapter ending techniques in different buckets, and we’ll see which bucket fills up fastest. The book starts out with two characters (Mal and Christopher) and I’ll label chapters accordingly.

Here goes.

Prologue (Mal)

“ … when there was a knock on the door.

It was the murderer.”

That IS kind of a cliffhanger-y chapter ending, but the chapter doesn’t finish in the middle of the action (Hardy-style). Instead, it closes on the cusp of something dramatic that’s about to happen. 

Also, this is really a prologue – it’s only a page long – so it plays by different rules.

Bucket: Cusp of drama

Chapter 2 (Mal)

“But they were busy, and people mostly let her be, to run and eat and fly.

Except, that day, for the murderer.”

This just picks up the exact same tune as the prologue. If we’re being honest, that tune has only very recently been played and it’s a bit weak to revert to it quite so soon. But? OK, I’ve done things like that myself. It is a compromise, but not an especially grievous one.

But the prologue was ‘cusp of drama’, because there was an actual knock at the door. Here, no action is on the point of being launched, so this is a promise of action but (because of the ‘that day’) with the status set to imminent.

Bucket: Promise of action (imminent)

Chapter 3 (Christopher)

“The way grew steeper, and the earth darker, a peaty black dotted with gorse. The air began to smell different – richer, and deeper, and wilder.”

This is an interesting one. You can’t really say that this foreshadows future action, because there’s not even a whiff of what any action might be. What there is here, however, is a sense of change, and a hint as to what that change is going to be.

It’s going to be richer, deeper and wilder, of course. But it’s also going to be steeper / darker / blacker. That is, it’s going to be tough and dangerous. This is good writing, for sure, because a perfectly normal comment about the changing landscape is interpreted – correctly – as a comment about the boy’s future.

Bucket: Foreshadowing change (non-specific)

Chapter 4 (Mal)

“She flew there, 23 feet up in the sky, the wind buoying her, her feet pointed behind.

She did not see that the murderer watched her go.”

This is now the third Mal chapter in a row that uses the exact same device – the exact same word – to propel reading. Honestly? I think it grates now. I’d have been happier with an ending along the lines of “She was confident that she’d escaped. Perhaps now, things could return to normal.” Any reader would interpret that as “Of course she hasn’t b****y well escaped, you idiot…”

But in terms of chapter ending style, we’re still in the same place as for the last one.

Bucket: Promise of action (imminent)

Chapter 5 (Christopher)

“’You’re welcome here: you’re my grandson, and it’s right that you should come. But don’t forget what I said [regarding a forbidden pond].’

He left. He didn’t notice – for even the wisest of the old forget, sometimes, the care and subtlety of the young – that Christopher had made no promise [again, in relation to the pond].”

This, by contrast, seems like a pretty much perfect chapter ending. The author is effectively promising that her character is about to do something that he shouldn’t do.

We don’t at this stage know what the consequences of that transgression will be, so we can’t quite bracket this as a promise of action. All we really know is that whatever Christopher does is going to alter things in an exciting way. So our verdict is …

Bucket: Promising change (non-specific)

Chapter 6 (Mal)

“She had thought about writing to them, to tell them what she knew, but had decided not to. She could not bear to risk him [her griffin, the last one left alive] being taken.

She shivered, hard. She tucked her hair into her navy fisherman’s jersey, and prepared to fly home.”

This chapter ending seems to me a little inert. And, OK, a great book can cope perfectly well with a few rather flat chapter endings, so I don’t want to make too much of this criticism. But the ending actually flattens any change, rather than creating it. The ending has a feeling of “OK, so we’re done here” to it, without undermining that statement, even metaphorically.

Bucket: Flat ending; no promise of change

Thoughts on all the above

What’s interesting to me here is that the best endings, to my taste, were the Christopher ones. They revolved around foreshadowing change / promising future action (not imminent).

The Mal chapter endings seemed either too flat (the last one) or too constantly dramatic (all the murderer-based ones). When I look at my own chapter endings, they tend to cluster very much in Christopher type territory: foreshadowing change / promising future action (not imminent).

That’s not at all saying that cusp of action endings don’t work – they certainly do, but they are the raisins in the pudding. They’re not the pudding.

Perhaps all this is just a matter of personal taste, but I really don’t think it is. I think that gives us a sense of what good chapters endings generally feel like. Join us over on Townhouse, if you can, and jump into this week’s Feedback Friday discussion. I think it’ll be very illuminating!

FEEDBACK FRIDAY / Chapter endings

Again, there are two FF options this week. One for those taking the Plan Your Romance Novel video course, one not.

Plot Your Romance Novel video course task: Write one or two sentences about how you plan to combine or subvert common romance tropes. Share this in the forum.

General task: Give us two or three of your chapter endings, just as I’ve done in this email. Share your reflections on whether they work and what you think they’re doing – and as always, please provide your book’s title and genre. When you’re ready, upload your work here.

Til soon. 

Harry