Right: is this better?

Jemima Hollywell has been so focused on what she doesn’t have that she’s lost sight of what matters. That is, until she meets ten-year-old Saffi, who faces a heart-breaking future, and Jemima’s life gains a whole new perspective.

Kate and Carole, or anybody else for that matters, I’d be grateful to hear from you if you have a spare moment. Thanks!