Feedback Friday 17th November
Title : Hold Fast to Dreams
Amy’s getting sorted before their trip begins. She’s up first, and feeling excited and happy.
Up in the dark, next morning, to leave early for their final week’s safari trip to Murchison Falls National Park, she crossed the courtyard of the house to the new western style toilet Darshan had installed specially for her. Back inside the silent house, Amy pulled the tiny light switch cord over the wash hand basin.
‘Shit!’ she mouthed to herself, head jerking back from the horrifying sight. The burst of light revealed two cockroaches, four inches long, at face level, on the mirror, antennae even longer, waving menace at her. Their light brown carapaces glistened. Clinging to the edge of the basin she swallowed down the fright. She blinked. In that second they disappeared. Staring at the glass, she thought, ‘Did I just dream that, or were they really there? Am I hallucinating?’ Quaking, she blocked the image from her mind. She observed herself in the mirror wondering why she was so jumpy, and stood quiet, listening to her own breathing, till the thumping of her heart calmed. The creatures had vanished in the blink of an eye and though her mind began to doubt their actual existence, she knew she had seen them.
‘Amy, you need to get a grip,’ she thought, taking a slow deep breath to find a means of grounding her over-hyped emotional state.
‘Just go and check the bags.’
She filled her mind with this mundane task and the cockroaches memory faded as she hurried to their bedroom.
Having risen at four, then out in the inky black night, they left Kampala behind around five, past tiny villages and townships, no signposts or names, past silent dark banana groves, grass woven huts, mud walled cottages and the occasional lone Ugandan man, walking in the pitch dark. Pravin and Amy felt a little scared at driving through the bush at night, but overlying that were bubbles of excitement about the trip ahead.
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