Change Me – fun extract
Posting something more light-hearted from my WIP this week. I’m a bit jet-lagged and trying to edit this scene. Would be grateful for comments about the appropriateness of the brackets or not – I never know if/when to use them…
Many thanks, in advance, if you read.
Title: Change Me
Genre: Commercial Women’s fiction, set over a 2-day motivational conference on Change, led by TK, a self-help guru from LA, where everything that can go wrong does. The story is told from the POV of Lauren, the event organiser, a young woman for whom this is a major career opportunity (if successful)
This scene: Mid-morning on the second day. Brad, one of TK’s party, decided late yesterday to offer a yoga class – another hassle for Lauren to deal with. Ruby is Lauren’s (temporary) assistant.
Fuck! The yoga. When Ruby does a mock double-take, Lauren realises she must have sworn out loud.
“That’s what I came here out to do. I need to find Brad and work out what he’s got planned.”
“Oh, I think it’s all sorted. He’s got mats for forty but doesn’t mind people sharing. The more the merrier, apparently. He’s using two rooms down there.” Ruby points to a corridor off to their left that, so far, they have not had access to. “And he’s made a sign.”
A billboard stands in front of the desk. Unbelievable she didn’t spot it as soon as she left the Great Hall; she needs to stop getting distracted by her phone. She walks round to read it. In green felt-tip Brad has scrawled the following message:
Let’s welcome the power of sunlight into our lives!
Feel its energy awaken a conscious connection between your heart and body, anchoring your spiritual wisdom and enabling you to support each other on your journey towards change
The Winston/Chamberlain Suite
Love Brad xxx
Okaaay. Firstly, a handwritten notice is unprofessional (he could at least have found a blue pen, to fit with the colour scheme). Secondly, it’s November, so there’s not much sunlight to let into anyone’s life (although he has drawn a sun in the top right-hand corner – a childish circle with lines radiating outwards). Thirdly, not ‘All welcome!’ as they only have forty mats and people sharing is a ridiculous idea. And finally, ‘Love Brad xxx’, is completely inappropriate.
Ruby grins at her expression. “He was telling me he transmits the sun’s energy and turns it into positive vibes. I mean, he’s completely out there, but kind of in an ok way. There are a lot of people desperate to attend his session.”
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