Capitalization in dialogue
In my novel, I’m bragging about the technical specifications of a car I used to own. Which parts should be written as words and which should be written as numbers?
His hand caressed the sloping bonnet with nostalgic affection. “Here we have a 1976 Basil Green Motors Capri Perana.” His speech was one of reverence. “One of only 300 ever made. Underneath lies a 5.0-liter Windsor V8 engine sourced from the Ford Mustang.”
He leaned closer, his voice resonating with the excitement of a true enthusiast. “It’s a spark-ignition, 4-stroke beast with a displacement of 301 cubic inches. Equipped with a Holley 460 CFM carb, aluminium high-rise intake, and enhanced with a high-performance cam and springs,”
With a flourish, he continued, painting a vivid image of power. “This pony produces 281 horses at 5,800 RPM, accompanied by over 400 pound-feet of torque.” He paused, allowing the weight of those numbers to sink in. “All that power flows through a close-ratio, 4-speed manual transmission to a limited-slip rear end borrowed from a Falcon.”
Eager to showcase every detail, Willem lifted the hood, revealing the gleaming chrome air cleaner. “And the best part? 0 to 100 kph comes in well under six seconds.” There was a glimmer of challenge in his eyes. “This gal will outrun anything on the streets, I guarantee it. She’ll hit 230 km/h if you put your foot down.”