{"id":6035,"date":"2019-09-20T10:13:49","date_gmt":"2019-09-20T09:13:49","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/jerichowriters.com\/townhouse\/articles\/ooh-tell-me-more-the-art-of-the-elevator-pitch\/"},"modified":"2019-09-20T10:13:49","modified_gmt":"2019-09-20T09:13:49","slug":"ooh-tell-me-more-the-art-of-the-elevator-pitch","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/jerichowriters.com\/ooh-tell-me-more-the-art-of-the-elevator-pitch\/","title":{"rendered":"Ooh, tell me more – the art of the elevator pitch"},"content":{"rendered":"

So. Elevator pitches.<\/p>\n

That\u2019s something we dealt with in one of my Festival workshops, and I wanted to pick it up again now. The issue is both finding the pitch that sparks interest in your book, then figuring out what to do once you have a pitch you love.<\/p>\n

But let\u2019s start with a sample elevator pitch. This one for example:<\/p>\n

A) Boy with magical powers plays a key part in the battle of good against evil.<\/strong><\/p>\n

What do you think? Do you like it? Do you want to read that book?<\/p>\n

And look: the pitch is sort of okaaaay, isn\u2019t it? But OK in a way which means that the book is basically not saleable. It\u2019s just too like every other kids fantasy book out there. There\u2019s nothing to distinguish this book from everything else. If I were an agent, it\u2019s not a book I\u2019d much care to represent.<\/p>\n

So what about this?<\/p>\n

B) Orphan goes to a school for wizards.<\/strong><\/p>\n

Or this:<\/p>\n

C) Orphan discovers he is the son of two very powerful wizards. \u00a0He goes to wizard school.<\/strong><\/p>\n

Or this:<\/p>\n

D) Harry Potter is an orphan in the care of his uncle and aunt. Their care is very poor.
Potter lives in an understairs cupboard, while his cousin is spectacularly spoiled.
The non-magical (or \u2018muggle\u2019) uncle and aunt try to prevent
Harry learning about his parents \u2013 powerful wizards \u2013 but fail.
He discovers he has magical powers and is invited (via owl) to attend wizard school.<\/strong><\/p>\n

Pretty clearly, this is a series of books that could do rather well. Yet there\u2019s a way in which elevator pitch A actually delivers the best description of the books. After all, the entire series arc is encapsulated in that description. The other three elevator pitches deal with nothing more than a few chapters of book 1. In effect, they deliver the inciting incident<\/a> and the immediate consequences, but little or nothing of the actual substance of the book.<\/p>\n

So why is that first pitch so weak? And why are the other three strong?<\/p>\n

The simple answer is that elevator pitch B makes you want to know more. It has, instantly, that \u201cOooh, tell me more\u201d quality which marks out any good elevator pitch.<\/p>\n

And indeed, when I do tell you more \u2013 when we jump from version B to version C \u2013 you still want to know more. Version C introduces Harry Potter\u2019s parentage. That\u2019s good, because it provides a connection between the orphan element and the wizarding one, but it introduces questions of its own. You still just want to know more.<\/p>\n

Version D might be a reasonable answer to that \u2018tell me more\u2019 question, except it isn\u2019t really an elevator pitch any more. It\u2019s too long. But you notice that even when you\u2019re dealing with something as long and detailed as D, you still have an appetite for more. (How does an owl send an invitation? How does Harry discover his magical powers? Why are the uncle and aunt so mean? And so on.)<\/p>\n

These expanding descriptions of the book keep you locked into a permanent desire to know more \u2026 and if I handed you the first chunk of HP and the Philosopher\u2019s Stone<\/em>, you\u2019d still be burning to know how the book and the series develops. That \u2018tell me more\u2019 impulse keeps pushing you to know more until you\u2019ve read every damn book in the series.<\/p>\n

Which brings us back to why it\u2019s so unbelievably helpful for writers to understand their own elevator pitches<\/a>. Why you need to scrap pitches that feel as bland and generic as (A) and find ones that are as sharp and precise as (B) or (C).<\/p>\n

The thing is, you don\u2019t ever have to use your elevator pitch with an agent, or an editor, or anyone else. There\u2019s never going to be a ten-word box that you have to fill in about your book. But you do have to understand the bit that makes readers go, \u201ctell me more\u201d, and then place that bit at the emotional \/ structural centre of your work.<\/p>\n

So if JK Rowling had been working with (A) as her internal compass for the series, she might have minimised her hero\u2019s orphanhood, she might not have found key roles for his vanished parents, and she might not have placed Hogwarts at the very heart of things. She might, in fact, have produced another bland, generic and unpublishable work of children\u2019s fantasy.<\/p>\n

But because, at least in her head, she was working with something like (B) or (C) as an elevator pitch, she placed those elements \u2013 orphan, wizarding parents, wizard school \u2013 at the very heart of the books. So yes, the series tells a story about the battle of good vs evil, but that story emerges from one founded on the exact elements that piqued the reader\u2019s interest in the first place.<\/p>\n

The same thing is true of absolutely any decent book and decent elevator pitch. So the pitch for my Fiona Griffiths series would probably be something like this:<\/p>\n

A crime series about a detective in recovery from Cotards Syndrome,
a genuine psychiatric condition. With Cotards, a sufferer
\u00a0believes themselves to be dead.<\/strong><\/p>\n

That doesn\u2019t tell you anything about the plots of the individual books, or the series arc, or anything else. In that sense, it\u2019s \u2018local\u2019 not universal. But that element of localism is essentially always true of good elevator pitches. Compare the universal-but-bland Harry Potter pitch A, against the local-and-interesting pitches B or C.<\/p>\n

And books are founded on the local. The universal can and should spring out of the local, but the local has to take precedence. So the whole architecture of Hogwarts \/ the Dursleys \/ muggle world vs wizarding world forms the foundations for the grand, universal story that lies on top. (And notice too, that whereas the Harry Potter pitch focused on the basic set up and the inciting incident, my own pitch ignores that completely and focuses only on character. The nugget at the heart of your pitch can come from anywhere.)<\/p>\n

The local vs universal thing is at work with the Fiona Griffiths stuff too.<\/p>\n

The whole complex series arc is built on Fiona herself. Her illness. Her recovery. Her strange sisterhood with the dead. My German publishers, in fact, have essentially the same cover for every book they\u2019ve released. Each book has \u201cFIONA\u201d in huge text front and centre across the cover. The actual title looks secondary in comparison. That\u2019s an almost literal picture of how the series is built. Hogwarts, and all that pertains to it, has a similar centrality in the Harry Potter books.<\/p>\n

So find your foundation. Find the thing that makes readers want to know more. Then place that thing, that vibration of interest, at the very heart of what follows. Make sure that as you start to expand the reader\u2019s circle of knowledge, the new elements you introduce keep the reader\u2019s interest.<\/p>\n

That, in a nutshell, is how you write and sell books.<\/p>\n

So now over to you. What’s your elevator pitch. And does it feel bland and universal? Or is there a local, specific quality which prompts that “tell me more?” response. Leave a comment and let’s all have a Heated Debate.<\/em><\/strong><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

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